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Flashing light effects, like those used 50 seconds in, should be used EXTREMELY sparingly. It can really fuck with people who have photosensitivity issues
Honestly not terrible. Personally lyrics in videos can sometimes be a turn off because more often then not you can't necessarily match the video contents to it. However for me a good PMV is one where the video & music are synced properly which I think you did here well. I'm not necessarily big on wasteful effects that are passively going along with the video. I feel like you'd best use them during transitions.
I see potential, I don't care what everyone else says. You got some good timing, just need some better taste in music. And try working on some VFX and transitions too. I suggest you to watch Samper Leaf or Shiranuistan for some ideas.