Lara Croft Adventures – Journey of the Tomb Raider

You did fantastic with this. I think the text being all over the screen was a bit distracting - I didn't notice the setting/days properly because catching the cursive text appearing before the scene changed was taking focus, had to rewatch to absorb the locations.

Not sure if putting everything in one section of the screen would look as nice, but perhaps at least closer together. The first watch I thought the static text was part of the original clips and unnecessary, and didn't realize you'd added them to add to the story until partway through.

really though, this was kind of crazy to watch because of the clear amount of effort you put into editing it. The storyline throughout that makes sense timeline and clip wise, clip choices carefully organized to illustrate time passing as she gets grungier, even just the cursive narrations' writing quality. This feels like a stupid comment to make under a porn video, but I legitimately rewatched it multiple times to fully understand the story you were telling, because it was actually compelling ????

This looks amazing, concept is great. You can Improve on the clips choice or framing and definitely font edit, but otherwise great. I've seen a comment about clips not being long enough but honestly the timing is perfect, it's just the fact that u spend the entirety of it trying to understand what the cursive says. Keep improving!

Honestly not terrible. The Cursive is a bit hard to read but had you used a narration in the same way as GlowingLightDude does I imagine this would turn out far better.

This is why lara is the perfect role model for all girls (❤️ ω ❤️)

You should have shown longer clips than you did.
Like, you can't even enjoy one thing.Before it's already onto the next