Qetesh Quick

OH! An improvement. I like improvements!! That's how my own imagination works. Start with an idea, then tweak as new ideas appear in your head.

One tiny suggestion: Consider drawing out the end shot of her head for a second or two longer. Gives the audience a chance to appreciate the thoughts and feelings growing in the character from the whole experience. Enjoying the results herself. (The viewer empathizing a bit of prolonged evil joy and self gratitude in the character.)

nice